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    3分鐘學會一個雅思7分句

    發布時間:2021-04-18

    教你學會一個7分句子。雅思7分作文,就是日復一日、點點滴滴的積累。

    In some countries, an increasing number of parents choose to educate their children at home by themselves instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

    應對上面這個題目學生在正文寫了如下一句話:

    Children in school not only can learn textbook knowledge but also can learn some skills. When children study in school, they need to communicate with teachers and classmates inevitably.

    教師修改后如下:

    Home school is for independent study; a conventional school is more like a community, a community where children work with mentors and peers, and this cultivates their “real world” skills in communication and cooperation.

    ★ 原句中被修改的幾處重復:not only … but also … 結構后動詞重復;children in school和when children study in school信息重復;need to和inevitably措辭重復。

    ★ 增添了一處信息,即分號之前的內容,短促地在句子里加了一處對比。分號前后都得是獨立的句子結構,并構成并列或對比關系。

    ★ 第二處增添的信息是對skills的細化處理,這里首先使用了同位語成分a community搭配where定語從句,闡釋一下常規學校的特點;其次,用and連詞連接分句,this指代前一整個分句內容。

    小總結:

    寫句子的時候,要注意不重復措辭,信息重復的情況下即便做了同義替換意義也不大,我們應該更重視不遺漏更有效的信息。

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